>>43545444Alright! Picking back up where I left off the previous thread, here's the progress I had on the story. I sadly haven't made anymore progress since then because I got stuck (and I was waiting for someone to reply to me).
Here's the message chain, with the "obvious progression" one being the anon I was waiting to reply me, and the ones below it (starting with the "Works for me" message) being mine:
The obvious progression is Flannery losing her composure entirely, Brendan having to calm her down a little, then her pulling off to the side to give him a little show to help him up again.
Works for me. I actually have an example sentence in mind right now, if you'd like to check it.
>He wouldn't have to wait long- the instant the words left his mouth, Flannery stopped dead in her tracks, her PokéNav nearly falling out of her hands. How's that? How should I progress from there? If you have one, an example sentence would be helpful (but I can go without it).
