>>48857777You have some good concepts with this post, but I feel like it could be better. Does something happen when he is yelling or is Tyrone just standing there emotionless like a breathing character in character creation? How did the your image get the way he is now? What is his party team looking like? I get what you were going for, but I don't think he's playing the game right now. He enjoys playing Black Version but why would he play Black Version as opposed to spending time to exclaim his statements? It's all very confusing, honestly. I think he should be looking at Black Version while speaking loudly to Tyrone. Does Tyrone do anything? Does Tyrone have a Tyrouge in a save file? What does his wife think of Pokemon? There's too much missing here but you have an interesting idea that can be expanded upon. Good luck with your fanfic, and I look forward to seeing what's next for you unnamed character that enjoys Black Version and is acquainted with someone named Tyrone who knows your character's wife.
