>>56653124>I already had my heart broken once before regarding that kind of thingAh, I get you. The amount of Kiki fics I've read that broke my heart one way or another heavily out-weighs the ones that didn't. Such is the yume life, or I suppose, since I've never lived the yume life pre-Kiki. Yet I can't stop reading them, because I need to remind myself there's always people who are better than me at writing, and I gotta keep trying, in order to at least equal them. In my mind, the moment I start thinking I'm the best, it's the moment it's over. But that's off-topic, sorry Anon. If a full TL of the LN comes out I could read it and summarise elements of it in a Nemona thread :D
>Gold CoastLooks beautiful, I'm jealous. Maybe I'd enjoy going to the beach again, if beaches here were like this.
>I see. You have some very nice ideas.Thank you! They're what comes to my mind when I think of these characters.
>That wouldn't make senseYou're right, gosh I'm stupid. But maybe, when she takes her phone out to record, Anon could catch a split-second glimpse of her phone screen and find out she's been looking at [Stack Overflow by any other name] before switching to the camera app.
>Maybe he just got off the train to Kiloude City?Oh yes, great idea! One of the prettiest places in Kalos imo. The Glaseado Mountain thing was just me spit-balling of course.
>The narrator is omniscient.Hmm, I think it could potentially take the reader out. Like, one moment they're in Anon's shoes, and feeling his tension about battling Nemona, and suddenly they're brought to Rika's mind. Could be jarring. I've seen contradicting opinions on POV stuff though? Personally I always find it jarring unless the POV switch happens between chapters.
>It shows that Nemona and Florian's positivity is contagious.Yes! That's what you're going for if I understand correctly :D
Maybe I'd also avoid direct references to game mechanics like HP? Since HP is just an abstraction of a Pokémon's battle "status".
