>>56929108Well, the ellipsis thing is odd and, not wanting to insult you but you will get people bothered by that. Some text editors even have shortcuts that just make ellipsis as a separate symbol in itself (meaning you delete it all at once). Just to show you how much of a standard, universal symbol it is. You can keep doing your thing, but know that it is factually wrong.
As for the word usage, you need to learn to divorce yourself as the author and/or narrator from the characters themselves. A writer's own vocabulary will almost always influence how a character speaks, but that doesn't mean they all need to speak standardized, correct, sterile and stale dialog. The more familiar you are with a character, the easier it becomes, if you do multiple stories with the same ones.
That pastebin example is exactly what I meant. I would never read that because it's just a gigantic wall of text with no discernible formatting, so it'd be a chore to read. You want to to digest things for the reader as much as possible so they can put their focus into getting invested in what the words say, not the text itself.
My personal take on speech is I make it it's own paragraph and do, at most speech > connecting narration > (optional) speech complement. Any more than that and I need to put it in it's own paragraph to avoid making the speech too bloated and run-on.
Depending on how different/unique the interacting characters' voices are, you can even just do speech > paragraph > speech with no connecting narration because the reader will easily identify which is which. The main rule for speech is to make it dynamic to read.
Imagine someone that ESL and can only speak basic English. They would speak like this. They would not use any contractions. It would be tiresome to hear them speak. It would be boring and stale. It sounds weird to hear. It is not fun. It is grating.
That's what you want to avoid the most.
