>>58332662>Poor Kiki, it's pretty funny to imagine him scrambling to get (You) some new books in hopes they'll be better...That, or challenging me to a Pokemon battle to stop, since that is seemingly a very common way of conflict resolution, lol.
but then he'd quickly realise being cute is a much faster and effective way of winning :V>2nd partFunnily enough, I only learned about it yesterday when a friend who knows of my bad literature habit told me that I should read it. I do have a copy of Manacled opened up in an adjacent tab, so that I can occasionally make comparisons between the two.
Anyway, I guess I can say a total of two good things about it.
1. There are some occasionally neat worldbuilding ideas.
2. It's neat that the author managed to get a great deal of financial success from it, including a $3 million dollar movie rights deal, given that she wrote on her phone's note app in between/while taking care of her child.
Besides that, it's fucking horrendous.
The worldbuilding/exposition is clunky, slow and dumps detail after detail every two pages or so. This might have been bearable if the fabricated world was particularly good, but it isn't and the story in general fails to create a coherent vision of the world the characters live in. This contributes in the pacing being utterly shot, since Manacled can assume you're familiar with HP, it moves much faster than its adaptation, for instance, Manacled introduces the
forced breeding program by around page 21, it takes till page 99 in Alchemised.
But this isn't the core issue, it's that the editor/author never really bothered to consider how the mediums differ, the overall structuring of the book is still as if it's AO3 fic, which just doesn't fit and at 1024 pages long, it's a fucking slog.
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