>>86218495It's being read, so it comes off better as 2nd person (you/your) vs. 1st (I/my). It can be written with speech in first person (ie your speech in the fic being 1st person like "I love you" coming from -self-insert character- towards -girl character in fic-) but your actions should be 2nd person (ie "your cock").
Don't know why, it just lets me self-insert better.
