>>42039889Glad to see another installment of this. There is definitely an improvement on scene descriptors in this one, which I enjoyed. You really painted the scenes a little better and gave them a little more substance. I like how the story is progressing, very cute. Just keep getting more descriptive and you'll keep making this story even better. I would give it another round of proofreading though if you can.
>Bae damns her luck at being friends with insomniacs that talk at 2pmI gotta assume that's supposed to be "am", I knew what you meant with the context, but I still had to do a double take of it. Also with that ending scene in general, it was hard to follow and try to figure out who exactly was talking. Since it's a scene based around a messenger app, it might be neat to play with the idea of giving each member an identifier of sorts on their text line. The simplest thing that comes to my mind is to color the text to indicate who the message is from. A highlighted color background might work for the format of retry, but I'm not too familiar with that for docs.
Overall, I liked it, and am super stoked you took the feedback from the previous chapter in stride. Keep it up!
