before I hit the hay here's draft 2 of the Kiara fic:
https://litter.catbox.moe/fefd3i.pdfI tweaked the opening a fair bit and will probably go back to work on pacing a bit more, so if anyone has tips on that I'd appreciate it
and here's draft 1 for comparison:
https://files.catbox.moe/p6fojt.pdf