>>76456560Thanks for the review! Would you say the lack of position switches is a detriment? I wanted to make the scenes count, but if it was lacking in variety that would be a thing to note down.
>physical sensations during the smutI guess you're thinking smell, taste, feeling of skin and the like? If so, noted.
Again, thanks for taking the time to read and review, hope you enjoyed, Polka-hime!
>>76459747Thanks a lot, glad you enjoyed it!
>>76460876Glad you liked it, as for your critique
>moral codeYeah, I can understand where you're coming from. I could pretentiously argue that the picture he paints as being "morally superior" was meant as just a skewed image he has of himself, but the whole thing isn't fully fleshed out - especially since other people refer to him as such as well. I should have either made him more resilient then break hard, put the 'moral bastion' thing as a tongue-in-cheek title the friends use to refer to him while he acts as anything but, or cut the whole thing from being used by others and go all-in on deranged self-perception. The way it is now, it's not really one or the other. Noted!
>alcoholprobably a cultural thing. You'll have a hard time not drinking at a wedding here. And if you did, you'd be either labeled a dry alcoholic, a weird religious person or the designated driver - definitely not a "moral bastion"
>feels like you two are friendswell, you are in a way. By association. I kinda drew that synergy
from my own experience - there are people in my friend group that I don't like, still banter with and probably would... you know? Maybe that's just me though. I'll think about how that could've been more impactful.
>friend groupyeah, I know there was potential there, but I felt like I would have to write another couple of thousand words to flesh a bunch of people out that would ultimately play no active role.
>Matsurihm, that's weird. Admittedly, my knowledge about her comes mostly from rrats and threadreading, but I do think there were a few instances where she went ballistic over fairly minor "picking someone else over her" kind of situations. Pretty sure there was one with Hoshikawa in particular - that's why I chose her for the role after all. But I couldn't cobble all the details together at this point. Sure, she's even more over the top in the story, but that she'd feel mischaracterised was not my intention. Sorry.
Anyways, thanks for taking the time to read, even if you didn't like everything - I'm just glad it evoked some feelings in you! Worst thing would've been for everyone to feel indifferent!
