>>59235464It's ok, it's much harder to write in a different language than what you're used to, but that doesn't take away from the enjoyment of the story.
Adding a part that indicates who's speaking each line helps a lot, it gets repetitive if there's a lot of talking when it comes from the same person, so you can either chain them together by doing things like describing tone of voice, and then the tone changes mid-way, or just keep it simple like "She continued" or "She proceeded to" etc etc.
Keep up the writing, it will always improve over time along with the grammar issues, the ESL, whatever else. I'm cheering for you anon, as a fellow writefag.
