>>46657534The premise and core of the story is cute overall. The first part before the scene break was really strong in painting the scene and kinda establishing the two personalities on a base level. It might be more of a personal preference, but the formatting could benefit from a little distinction between the back and forths the anon and kaela have.
I think a little more background info on the anon itself, his motivations, and how he weighed the risks involved vs the rewards would have been beneficial. Likewise for Kaela I think. Overall it was a cute read and you have the chops and makings to create something cute and interesting with this premise if you choose to use this as a springboard.
Probably just as important, I want to point out that it's awesome that you went from a previously scrapped idea, to taking the plunge and doing something with it anyway! Those kinda guts will take you far, and your stories farther.
