>>73016108fixed the formatting issue.
thats a fair criticism. for what it's worth, the #shiorinstories tag when it was still alive mentioned that it was fine if shiori was a minor character, and i guess i had in mind that spirit of fanfiction. that said, given how long this is, i'll admit it's drifted more away from shiori than i hoped. 1. i do think... this might sound like a cop out but part vii is going to be a lot more shiori, esp backstory wise. that's a bit dissatisfying since part vii is so far off. 2. honestly, though, i would like to tie her in better and probably will try to do that in future revisions that get a lot more down to tacks in reconceptualizing content and pacing.
part of me suspects the effect is magnified by the fact that part vi is populated by characters who didn't even exist in my head when i wrote parts i to v, and it creates a lot of whiplash for the reader.
in the short term though, i'll see if i can nudge the shiori-ness a bit in the upcoming chapters, just so it isn't so ????? for novelites especially
