>>13413538Hey anon, thanks again for the high praise. I get the criticism, but this long, drawn-out and somewhat uneventful buildup to the sex is exactly what I had set out to write in this story. Just spending some time cuddling and hanging out with Okayu, lazily wasting the day away next to her until things got naturally frisky. Sure, you could write "And you spend an entire afternoon doing nothing" in a paragraph to give the reader the idea; but I wanted you to feel it, build tension and for it to feel like time had really passed.
I kind of wanted a bit more dirty talk out of her, but in the end I didn't go overboard with it. It's one place I know I can do better.
Any particular favorite parts or things that hit the horny sweet spot I can keep doing for next stories?
