>>87744892It's not half bad.
The other anon commented on the 'back and forth formating' not really working, and I agree but my problem with it is more from the fact that it's effectively used to 'skip' over the fingering, by way of just having dialogue instead of going in detail about sadistically fingering Ame.
What I like about this is the atmosphere, the multiversal scumbag thing works pretty well.
Honestly the only real problem here is that the smut's just not at the quality as the set up. You have the ideas for good scenes here and dialogue that would work with them but the actual smut is just too short/abridged and not focused on the actual erotic details that would make this fappable.
