>>95534463i get what you are talking about. I didnt want to "characterize" the scene to try and evoke the feeling of helplessness and void, but i think i went a little too freeflow.
>>95552740>>95560446hmmm. i chose Nerissa specifically because despite how much she yaps, she gets swallowed by emotion real fast and i really like that about her and Shiori (that mute empathy before they eventually speak), but you are totally right in that it could be, for example, Marine and it wouldnt change much. Guess i got too lost in the sauce there
>And what's your hang up with punctuation?Im actually atrocious at it, its probably showing a lot in these two last entries because im mentally drained due to life circunstances and i can barely pick up writing.
Im not gonna pretend im gonna get better overnight because i've always sucked at it, but i do plan on triying to get better and reaching for betareaders
when i inevitably sit down and work on my bae wips... 