>>64267856Glad you found my review informative.
If it helps to think about, a goal that I practice myself is to write my characters in a way that someone reading who is not familiar with the chuuba, can get a good idea about who they are and what they're about. Like if someone isn't too familiar with Miosha, I want to be able to paint a clear picture for them. I sure as hell ain't gonna hit 100% accuracy to the real deal, but I strive to write them and their mannerisms in a way that is clearly inspired by them.
Letting characters bounce off one another is an easy way to showcase traits, but when they're on their own and not concerned with anyone else's image of them, that's an opportunity to showcase a true self, or how they dawn a mask to help them in whatever situation they are in. You can show off a lot about a person when they have no on to consult with.
For the Towa thing, it's alright if that stuff will be elaborated in the future, but at the time I'm not really aware that there is anything to elaborate on / if it will. If she was able to get right back up due to her gift, a way to show off that there is something more or that, or that it's something to be explained is to have Aloe grumble something about how she expected her to get back up. Something that tells the reader that something external was done, but let them think about what it could be. At least in the case of defying death, abilities should be made known to the reader in some way. They can be left a little vague and built upon as the story goes, but a little smidge can go a long way.
For proofreading, you just gotta keep practicing. You'll get better each time and be mindful of your mental state when you do it. A fresh mind can catch things a weary one will not.
Again, glad you're taking the feedback in stride, that'll go for miles.
