>>53202357The linking of other stuff is definitely a bit of a slippery slope. It's tempting to throw in a bunch of references to weird shit and just link something that explains it to save myself the trouble, but as you say it kind of breaks up the flow of the reading. Maybe it's a bit of a crutch at times.
Oh yeah, the accent conundrum. That's always a dilemma. Immersionkino, or readability? I'm never sure I'm happy with my decision after kek. My first draft was actually a bit heavier on the scottish drawl, so I'm glad I toned it down. Chatting with sapling was definitely a huge help for this chapter, that's my favorite part of this project I think. Drawing ideas from other people just injects perspectives and elements that I'd never think of on my own. I'm also a big fan of moving chuubanite outside of the rock, into bones, acorns or tea. Although the Mt Mori diamond is one of the more egregious examples of "chuubanite as a gem" kek. I'm pretty excited about where Ailbhe's arc ends up going, I set up some hooks in there.
Pink power nanora. Writing battle scenes is usually a bit intense. There's so much happening and I'm always drawn towards describing the action to an unreadable minutiae of details even though the text is stronger being a bit more to the point. It's probably obvious given my recent contributions, but I've had a lot of fun brainstorming Daemon mechanics and workings, I kinda have to hold myself back from just exposition dumping info on them in the text kek. Works better to pepper it in.
The "More capable machine = more pilot strain" is definitely a common trope (it's not intentional, but I'm pretty sure my subconscious came up with that based on Permet Scores from the latest Gundam), but I'm happy with my implementation.
I kinda want to make a cute drawing of the battlefield kek, maybe that would help with visualization. What style might a Lunaito corvette have?
Thanks for the general praise, I appreciate it. I think there are plenty of writers better than me in the thread. Among the recently active ones, I'd suggest you read the ongoing /vnug/ story if you haven't, it's been a great source of inspiration and motivation.
>>53206421Devanon love!
