>>81057417I think you captured the feeling of being an aging husband and wife perfectly; the fits of insecurity, the longing for resentment as that sometimes validates the internal resentment you have for yourself, and the unconditional acceptance and love. It's a beautiful little piece that nails what it means to want to grow old together.
You got a few missing spaces and periods here and there
The touch,the feel.The two beasts once more dance together - which might flow off the tongue better if it was The two beasts dance together once more, (but that just might be a personal preference.)Nothing really stuck out at me other than that. I also really liked the background you included to the relationship and Choco herself.
