>>14011580This leaned more into horror than I had hoped, but it was certainly interesting. Whilst I can't speak for everyone, the descriptions of
bones breaking and flesh tearing sort of ruined the appeal of the transformation and unbirth part. In spite of that, the general idea was pretty solid, and the note on how you wanted to continue it sounded really appealing. The
horn powder snorting also came out of left field. After the fact, I can sort of understand why it may have been necessary story-wise, but it's still weird to read.
Even with that criticism, I really liked the writing overall. If you wrote a story in line with what you are familiar with, I believe you could write some really good works.
