>>84241394i think the problem here is that you are going "matter of fact"
think of writing as telling a story. Would you tell a harrowing tale of a man getting swallowed by a plant so dryly? would you be bored if you were talking about your fetish?
You are telling me "anon got snuggled"...okay. Its that bad? good? hot? what happened?. Its well put together, but it reads like an essay rather than something you wanted to put.
For starters i would say you need to define what's the point of this story.
If its to make you have a chuckle and go "cute", then play up the scaryness of the scene and then get a second hit of sweetness, add dialogue, internal thoughts, etc. Dress up the scene
If its eery, make me feel scared. This plant is devouring anon and he just goes "ah shit, guess im donezo". Add descriptions that make you worried or scared, thoughts about not wanting to be scared.
Is this hot? why? do plant tits have a particular softness? is there a boner? does she smell good? how good? where are her hands going and how is this hot?.
Basically, picture what you want to tell and constantly tell yourself "that's the one, i like that"
