hey so, im pretty new into the writing stuff and i wanted to put down an improvised story with moomers and kronii's berry shenanigans, very rough stuff. Could someone part ways with some of their knowledge on what to do and improve?
link here:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/17ndeYr5oPIgm32-EhgvAtSraQdjzjZ5oOmjvRwXE1lw/edit?usp=sharingthank you in advance! (it's meant to be something of a fluff/suggestive story, contains a bit of stuffing)