I return with draft 3:
https://files.catbox.moe/45sas2.pdfFigured out a better idea for the ending than what I'd originally planned, so I think going forward I'll focus more on fleshing out what I already have. I know this isn't /wg/ but if anyone has tips on that I'd appreciate it
And here's draft 2 for comparison:
https://files.catbox.moe/8tkrno.pdf 