>>76499111Thanks man! Shion was really fun to write, I wish I could've given her more screen time. And I've reread the piece myself with all the feedback in mind by now.
Can definitely see how the "moral" aspect seems like a dead horse that keeps on getting beaten - to the point it makes me cringe just reading the word at this point. I must have developed a blind spot for how it actually appeared in reading over it so much.
Didn't even plan on it being such a big hangup, more like a twisted self-perception Anon has developed to cope with being horny for Hoshikawa. You know in the way of
"that bitch keeps switching boyfriends but won't fuck me. Not that I even want to. I'm totally above that. Why? Morals and shit" I thought about going back to those passages and change them up a little... maybe more "patch" than "fix" them, but that feels kinda cheap now that it's published. I'll have to think about it.
>characteryea, that's a fine line to balance. If I'd made her "nicer" that would've made Anon's aversion all the more unreasonable and the premise would've not worked as good. But that's a bad excuse - my knowledge of her is very clip-based so I probably just don't know enough about her to hit the nail on the head.
Thanks for reading and glad you enjoyed!
