>>84277145Yeah, its a mixture of emotion and a dry scene.
What i mean its the following
SCENE: Your girlfriend Gigi looks cute and you wanna kiss her
>"Gigi was sitting on the desk, talking to you. Her small frame was cute, and her delicate lips called me to kiss her. Without a single thought, i stood up and kissed her, watching as she blushed"Looks and reads fine, but its real dry. Less dress this up
>"Gigi was sitting on the wooden desk, legs dangling as she talked your ear off about some weird spinoff. Ignoring her talk about Sandalphon or other characters, i focused on her lips. They were cute, and they called to me. Almost like i was possesed, i stood up and kissed her, watching her go red and stammer"This reads a bit better, but dont you think it reads...generic? Ill inject more of my ideas of what makes this situation cute and keep dressing it up
>"Gigi's legs kicked up and down cutely as she sat on the desk. You could hear her yap for hours and hours about boys and their holes or whatever she wanted to talk, but today you had eyes for one thing: Her lovely lips.>"Cherry red and a bit dry, yet also appealing as they flapped like crazy about some werewolf guy. They were taunting you, forcing you to stand up and lean into her. Her yapping came to an abrupt end as you kissed her, ears shooting steam as her face turned red with shame."As you can see, what you can do to always better a scene is to iterate on it. Think about what you want to say, then build on that. Dont be afraid to erase progress or comeback to it later.
If you write about kissing girls, make sure your reader can go "that's one girl i wanna kiss!".
