>>73833822Well I got through it. I like bigger girls, but feeding is just not something I can mesh with. Anon felt like a fucking super villain with how this played out. The scenes kinda go from point to point of how his master architecture plan comes to fruition. The relationship, manipulation, and the obesity skeeved me out a bit, so I have to assume that means you nailed the fetish as a whole. I was real fucking close to tapping out at the crust scene though,
but good job playing on how Reine is also a bird. And then again with the pizza slice, that's just nasty.
I'll echo the other anon and say the scenes needed some time to mature into their own things. If you just wanted to get as many parts of this fetish in this piece that you could, you probably did it, but I'm not sure if anyone who is really into this will find it to be a satisfying fap piece.
Unless they are so starved (heh) for the content that even a little amount does the job. Overall, prose was serviceable, no formatting or spelling errors jumped out at me, and it has a clear plotline for what it wants to do. I would argue some of the details were kinda strange,
how it's presented that you and Reine are dating but you're teasing her the next second about her loving Kiara. As far as I know though, this is probably a perfect piece for the fetish it caters to, so nice work on that end I suppose.
