>>88040890Greasy chimkin...
Your prose and formatting are pretty good actually. Dialogue that exists is short and snappy so far so there's not much to say in regards to character depiction. Have you submitted anything here before?
In less important news, can't recall what thread you were asking in the other day but I do actually remember that Souls progression question and I wish I'd answered because like the other anon says, she'd be practically speedrunning if she were at Gargoyles in 90 minutes. If you wanna get real literal about it she'd probably hardly be out of character creation but even putting that aside, post-Taurus would be a hard ask.
