>>74199577It reads a little dry. Some descriptors/words are used back to back in a few places. The plot itself is kinda abrupt. I'm not expert or even an avid fan of grooming and molesting, but it feels like the proper buildup and emotional investment isn't quite there. There is also a clear disconnect between (You)r supposed established attachment to Ciyana and how the rest of it plays out. Then again, I'm probably not the target audience for this kind of stuff, so I might not know what the hell I'm talking about. I suppose as a fic it could use some more paint. It has almost nothing to really immerse the reader into the setting and just kinda fires you out of a canon into some things that will likely fuck with a child's development.