>>95648559Thanks for reading, I seem to have posted it at the worst possible time. Appreciate the feedback.
>Don't take this the wrong way but this feels aggressively "2020-era holomyth shipping fic"I don't take any of those words as negative. I guess my question is, what should I do with this observation?
>This is kind of unfocused, having half of its runtime be in 'full detail' with Laplus and Marine cameos when it really should have just been flashbacked.Her crisis wouldn't feel earned without seeing the ramifications of her agency, no? Or are you saying the focus of the first half should be more on the aftermath than the mission itself? I can see the merits of that.
>Thus the actual ship moment of Gigi relating her turning gremlin to CC's wish to return to mindless automation is kind of sidelined.This idea did start out as a focus on shipping, but it quickly changed to exploring Ceci's character while writing it
I looove philosophical explorations of artificial humans, just look at how much I wrote about Penny from RWBY back in the day. The shipping became an extension of her growth rather than the whole point of the fic. However, I did wish I could put more focus on their interaction than on the setup, but alas, time constraints. Maybe I'll expand it and rewrite the setup after the contest is over.
>You do write the autofister dynamic pretty good but you need to work on your story planning Thanks! I agree that planning is a weakness of mine, I don't ever write anything long enough to truly train that muscle. Although, writing this gave me an idea for a long-form CCGG fic in the same vein...
