>>39617366Damn, I shouldn't have read the spoiler. Still funny though.
While I do like what you're trying to do with the worldbuilding, it was a struggle to visualise the surroundings and other descriptions, especially around the beginning. There were also a lot of words you threw in there that were never given an explanation. Maybe some more time elaborating on things would have been good. I also don't really think the Japanese streamer thing fit with the story and it kinda felt forced in. Your writing quality is decent, though there were a few hiccups here and there. While I'm definitely not a fan of mecha I'd really like to see a continuation, because I am a huge fan of seeing authors create their own unique worlds and build on them. 