>>84918197There isn't a ton here yet, so there's not a lot of feedback I can come up with. Although it feels like scenes are not properly transitioning from one another. The first segment focusing on Gigi needs a little more of a clean close to it.
The parts with Ame are decent but need a little more omph to her emotions and view of the scene. The parts where you describe her watch are good, I can feel the texture of it if that makes sense.
I think it's a nice start, but I think focusing on each scene will go miles for you. Make them a little more robust.
