>>61239678As a writer, this is pretty stale prose. Not a single sentence is engaging. Not one. Even for a reader self-insert fic, it's pretty assumptive to write (You) as a chuckling, stuttering dipshit in a (white)knight costume that startles and gasps at a Shiori jumpscare.
But also,
>friendly hug>friendlyEither redundant phrasing or trying to distance herself from gachikoi. Lol.