>>104591590Well, first of all the plot itself is generic and cliche, it's blackmail porn which is something that has been repeated like a fucking billion times.
But what pesters me the most is the hyperfocus on certain things.
>In the video, she was wearing a white bare midriff tank top, a long navy-blue side split skirt that covered much of her legs, and a pair of white sneakers without laces because her feet could perfectly fit into them.What's the point of detailing every single diminute fucking thing? It does nothing for the plot and it only comes off as pretentious. I'm a fanfiction writer, although I prefer more much light hearted stories. Ironically enough, stories with so much angst and so much depravity come off as juvenile, not something written by an adult.
