>>24963786I'll echo the previous reviews about the improvements over last time and the extra work she put in. It struck me how elaborate the scenario became, ultimately transforming into the character's expression of a need for intimacy and packing a lot of drama into seven short minutes with only one speaking character. The neediness should be annoying but there appears to be an undercurrent of honesty that transforms it into something more loving that takes what is, on the surface, a demand for the listener's affection, and turns it into an expression of affection from herself as the speaker.
The ending was notably abrupt but I think all it needed was a few seconds of sound effects like sheets rustling or her breathing as she falls back asleep, maybe asking for the clichéd "five more minutes" as she does so.
