>>80100226I think the prose is very good, even though it needs a bit of formatting to be a bit easier to read. Dont particularly vibe with footstuff but the rest was hot and i agree that the knight was a bit bland, but he worked for what it was
I feel like i have nothing else to say aside from that so im gonna mention something slightly autistic that took me off: acknowledging how dumb her clothes are.
Vtuber designs are kind of dumb yes, but i feel like acknowledging how some of the clothes dont work just takes me out of the story. it feels like someone nudging me in the ribs and doing picrel for no reason.
i have nothing against the story really, but that one thing took me off
