>>73445076Man, where to start with this one. First off amazing job getting the first part of your remake finished, it definitely reads with so much more flourish than the original and has the beef to it that you clearly want it to have. The way you did what I would call intermissions to help with the worldbuilding was really smoothly executed. The scenes were really easy to read through and I really like the Ame angle in this. I'm looking forward to seeing where that part of the story goes. I think you nailed the vibe and putting me into a dusty, harsh, and overall unpleasant world, I could really picture the scenery.
Like with the original, I like the Anon in this a lot, it really captures the gruff survival driven persona that has his own failings as well. Aqua's portrayal is adorable and it's no surprise she invokes a passion to protect, even if it may not seem like the best idea at the time. Even your jobber goons had the appropriate amount of life and color to them that makes their roles even more enjoyable.
The action was easy to follow and had a fun vibe to it, I enjoyed every line of it.
Music choices were top tier. I love seeing that come together so nicely.
I hope I can pull that off too one day, but I cannot for the life of me figure out how to isolate a single track to a scene. Overall, this was a really fun read and I'm looking forward to the next part. I think you really nailed this remake bro, rock on.