>>21664307I thought for a moment that you were that cheeky guy who said I'm autistic.
I really like how you both ask for constant criticism and take it well.
Here is how I would fix this if this was my job to do so. You can feel free to dismiss everything I write here, but I would like it if you heard me out.
If you don't mind as well, please give this critique as is to your artist for his consideration. I would like to critique his work directly to him for his consideration.
>The faceRather than generic, it looks kind of dorky, like a face that you would not expect to see on anyone other than some bystander. I think there is more personality that could be given to the face relatively quickly and simply.
>The defenseI think you can pretty easily give the character proper defensive wear if you give it a tad bit more thought. I put chainmail underneath his sweater I gave him a strapped shield on the off hand, and armor on the backside of the glove, this is fine because the glove can't bend backwards anyway. I gave him steel toes and you could probably imagine that he has some shin defense underneath his clothes.
>The helmetHis overall look leaned towards heavy and towards winter. A helmet can give him lots of character and create anticipation for when he takes it off or puts it fully on. Helmets are pretty rare these days in fantasy design, it can look really cool and stand out
>BeltsI removed the massive sword and turned his emblem belt into a sword pouch belt. I made it a bit tighter around his waist since it is the primary cloths holder, and I added a pouch on the opposite side to the offhand
>daggerI added a dagger to the shoe opposite to the offhand. This will make for a quick draw for dual wielding or fighting enemies who are too close to his long sword.
>scarfI made it long enough to be effective in his extreme cold condition, I put it under the helmet so the metal won't freeze the skin, I gave it a pin so that it could hold on properly.
>I left the stylized bottom of the shirts as is. It looks cool and does not make things more or less complicated to wear.>blazerI removed the blazer with the shoulderpads. It was way too much. Maybe it could be stylistic town wear but for a warrior it is ridiculous. You have to consider than even cloud has an outfit that he can take off in seconds, one with just a sweater, right hand defense, left hand offence, baggy pants and some comfy boots. That is all he's got. You can get far enough in interesting design just by thinking about practicality and clan belonging.
If you look at the designs of Kentaro Miura you will notice that there are very few stylistic portions in the designs. The complexity comes out of practicality and the chaos of being cobbled together. They look incredibly iconic despite being entirely practical.
