>>12662866Probably and most likely not. There's only so much you can at a written JOI, given that it's all about timing and the voice. I struggled to give more motions than jerking off here, I didn't even do much of "I want you to do X" which is the main part of a JOI and just filled it with dialogue at times, so even just one was already hard.
>>12665786This is probably one of those stories I'll regret not putting more love into because I abandoned her personality after the start. In my mind, I had it that she switched with Ayunda, but the bad English and lewd jokes just didn't happen even though they should have and that to me is annoying. Even if you say it's better this way, I'll still have to disagree because that's kinda the main focus of writing.
>>12667266What REALLY happened is that I was skimming through her streams at the start to make sure I was getting her right, but that was taking hours and I really didn't want to just copy some words she said in random streams, so I ditched that. Unfortunately, that led to her personality getting lost almost immediately. Still glad it was enjoyable to some extent to you.
>>12668456I actually get shit done really quickly when I actually know what the fuck I want to do with the story, like an end goal. In here, I already knew everything I had to do, but for example with my Risu futa fic, I have no idea where to go next so it's taking a while.
I had planned to make use of the Risu/Ayunda personality switching, but I didn't really using more of my time on making lewd edits of her main costume because it's a bit time consuming. That's the main thing, along with giving her personality some more attention, that I would change if I could in this fic. Risu the more bubbly one telling you to jerk off quickly while cracking jokes, and Ayunda teasing you in her deep more serious voice for her enjoyment... that is, after all, what makes her so special.
