Obviously too late for this, haven't watched the VOD, sorry it's just criticism and no compliments, not mentioning typos. I still love this project and everyone's efforts.
>Cover
I understand it's the nature of the art used, but Bea should be centered on her torso, not her whole body and arms. Not including text previews of the contents like in the original Who is (you) magazine makes the cover feel more like an artbook than a magazine.
>Table of Contents
The quadcolor band should've been spaced more cleanly. See how Fizzy Air and Thumbnails for Dummies has both the yellow and blue band behind it? They should be behind just the blue band, with the edge of the blue band at the midpoint between that row and the row above.
>The Bear Necessities
The L in last month isn't indented like the rest of the occurrences in the page.
The AI in the bottom section is bottom aligned unlike the rest of the page which is center aligned.
>Wish You Were Here
Just maybe run the sharpie through one more time on the beatangerine to darken the lines. Could be done in photoshop as well.
>Slam Koma
Nothing to say for manga design
>Lipovitan D
Text needs to be broken up, reads like a script to be delivered via voice, not via text and graphics. Freshly squeezed tangerine juice should be reduced to be one line, maybe just fresh tangerine juice and then pushing the photo to the left a bit for more room. Ingredients should be either left justified, or aligned such that "mL" is in the position for every line.
>Killer merch
Very little room between the text sections. The black line seperating the top left and bottom left sections is round capped on one end and flat capped on the other. Not unreadable, but the lines are the bottom conflicts with the shadows of the paper a bit .
>Sex Corner
The tribute stain is amusing and renders the tiny scribblings moot.
>Bear Paws Comic
Is there a reason why the first 4koma doesn't have a title?
>Final Yab
I think a different front would've provided a stronger effect, like a type writer or light script.Also, reverse the ordering and having the image on top with the text at the bottom
>Game Review
The indenting of the text is also different on each page and it seems the first 2 pages have some content cut off at the left. Most evident on the second page where a few letters of each line is cut off.
>Remote Kid's Big Day Off
Given the collab nature of this project, I keep forgetting which comics are left to right, and which are read right to left.
>Papercraft with Beatani
Instruction grid should be aligned
>Beatani Stencil
Listed near the end of the magazine in the table of contents, nothing to say
>Fizzy Air
Nothing to say for manga design
>Bea Visits the Zoo
No comment
>Lunch of XP Hill
Similar to Final Yab, though in this case, could've benefitted from splitting the text into two columns, which is generally more readable, and then having Beatani stand tall between the columns.
>Fishing for Risunas
Nothing to say for manga design
>Beatang's Vacation
A little odd having the beach only occupy 1/5th of the page, generally it's on either end of the golden ratio
>My cute oshi can't be this bushi
Nothing to say for manga design
>The History of XP Hill
The blue box needs a bigger margin at the bottom. I think distinctions should be used between the event title, and description, for example just bolding the event title and making the description one font size smaller.
>The Chronicles of Beatani Lover
I think this would've benefitted greatly with some dates or visual cues for how long each part was. Also, it feels strange to see these in quotes and not as screencaps of the posts themselves. The comments of each post would also be better off in italics to highlight that it's the author's explanation of each quote.
>Vocabulary Lesson
Nothing to say for manga design
>Day in the Life of Risuna Chan
Photographs normally have white borders instead of black, unless these are framed which I doubt. Sticky notes and tape (For the back of the photographs) are also generally used on whiteboard instead of particleboards.
>Coupons
Nothing to say
>Beatani Ending Song Sheet Music
Credits are not very readable and I don't think it should be so if intentional.
>Ultra Nu
Nothing to say
>Beatani Poster
I don't know if this one is in the table of contents. Should add a note that the posters are 1:1 scale. The cut out information isn't equally spaced
>Hobo Dad's Travel Blog
Nothing to say
>Thumbnail for Dummies
I don't think there's anything to gain by having white boxes in the template instead of the actual buttons and label. Could remove that part, move the descriptors to the left pointing down at the good thumbnail, and use the new space on the right to explain how the buttons cover up the thumbnail text.
>O Bea, Where Art Thou
Even with the text outline and shadow this is difficult to read. One normal solution is to have a transparent white box behind the text that washes the background out
>Comments
Should've been titled
