>>1523310>> the line work thickness is inconsistent>yes, and that's the pointI'm still going to point out two major places where it looks like ass in this image. I'm also not a fan of how you've terminated some lines in the hair - IF you want me to point them out, I will.
Red is consistency/problem areas (more than just consistencies) and the blue are what I liek how you did the lines. To be honest: Unless the shadow color is going to be black, that large black "clump" in the hair should really be turned into a "thin v" in contrast...
