>>1897286A little bit, but you need to get in the habit of giving hair direction. You want the tips to curve out and be thin so that they appear wispy. You also want hair to appear like it is continuous, so any time you have a major disconnect in lineart, you need to make sure that the hair continues to flow as if it was one shape. You also forgot some of the hair on her left shoulder.
The skin color should also be redone. For the skin color, keep it within these values in the HSB scale: H: 25-35, S: 15-24, B: 95-100. She is a rather pale character, so low Saturation and high Brightness is what you're looking for.
The original image is not a good source of coloring in general, so if you can, always look up fanart of the character over color picking from an anime screenshot.
