>>1961533good, but you're still using Chibis, so try something that is not using the "thick lines" style.
Try doing this one for its simplicity and change of style. I only want you to focus on the linework for this - do the hair and post, then after we comment, add in the skin parts and post, then do the same for the clothing and post.
It shouldn't take that long to do, and will give you a better scope on how to not only meta-game,