>>1585497Sloppy line work, And the blunt ends are horrible. This will look VOLUMES better by fixing all the areas. He also has a lot of "blocky" places where he's placed too many nodes - you can do a LOT more with the bezier levers than people realize.
Overall, it has a LOT of promise, but fix those areas first, then have him work on his consistency for his lines, and it'll be a sharp piece.