>>1692348You fixed a lot of things, but you also darkened her hair instead of lightening it, and left her skin tone too dark.
Also like
>>1692272 said, you should be using fills instead of strokes or whatever weird thing is going on so her hair tapers to sharper points instead of ending in squares.
Here's a quick swatch of her hair I threw together with fills (note the sharp points) and the correct colour.