>>1740144>>1740158It is never too late to change thickness of lines. You would be surprised how often I and many others are changing thickness for entire areas of drawings constantly, all the way to the bitter end. As for if it is too thick, that is more a personal preference. I found myself making lines too thin, so I have actively been trying to thicken my lines more. Honestly, the thickness in this one looks fine to me.
However, his other statements are true. The hands are very poorly done. Her right hand is incorrectly drawn and looks very awkward. Keep it like the original, where the index finger line should cover all the fingers behind it. All the finger tips are also way too pudgy, and lack fingernails, where applicable. Make the ends more pointy, but not too drastically. You want something in middle. You will of course want to add the fingernails as well.
The eyes are also poorly done. Use the circle tool, and do not have this weird cutout where the highlights are. That cutout does not exist. The highlights are simply in a higher layer than the eye lines. The inner coloring is quite faded. Add some saturation to them. For the whites of the eyes, do not have them go below the bottom eye fold. Instead, have them go into them. You also have a shadow extending outside of the white on her left eye. Keep it in the white.
You also have this issue where you have lines becoming other objects. Don't do that. For instance, the face line doesn't become the ear line, or her left hand line doesn't become the armor line. Either separate it, like for the face, or clearly show it goes into the armor for the hands. You did this already (probably subconsciously) for her right hand.
You are also missing many shadows and highlights. Go through the original once more and add in the missing ones. Some of the coloring is also quite faded and needs some saturation as well.
Here is reference for the fingers, eyes, mouth, and face.
