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im here 2 be yelled at about my ocs being mary sues again

this freak again Sat 28 Oct 2023 05:09:23 No.1413159 View View Reply Original Report

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just comment and ill give you a short oc profile to yell at me about. specify fandom or original if you want

faq:

q: is this a kink thing?
a: no. i just get this intense urge to be yelled at about my ocs being mary sues (ft. extremely unpleasent physical sensation) that just gets worse and worse until i manage to get it fulfilled, which provides only release from the suffering and no positive sensation

q: you need help
a: i know. but i havent had a therapist in years, i dont know how to get one, and even if i did the only thing that solves the immediate problem is this.

Anonymous

Anonymous Sat 28 Oct 2023 05:25:16 No.1413163 Report

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I think that's a pretty good OC actually, keep up the good work OP!

this freak again

this freak again Sat 28 Oct 2023 05:31:18 No.1413164 Report

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i assume you are being sarcastic, but like thats not my oc
its just a random image i found when i googled "mary sue"

this freak again

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this freak again Sat 28 Oct 2023 06:40:07 No.1413177 Report

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aaaaanyway, heres an oc that is mine

name: beep boop
pronouns: he/him
setting: skaiason combinatory canon
powers: none

story: beep boop is a penodir, a robotic species created by a pseudodeity (anything powerful enough to be mistaken for a deity that hasnt actually undergone apotheosis) to earn him money on the black market by killing and dismantling sapient beings, who he would then sell on the intergalactic black market using one of his multiple bodies.
he kept the penodir loyal to him by telling them the people they were killing were just animals and then, when they got old enough to develop the critical thinking skills to realize what they were doing, physically and mentally resetting them to toddlerhood

eventually the penodir pseudodeity is murdered by a more powerful pseudodeity for relatively petty reasons and the penodir are liberated, but beep boop is one of four adult penodir from before that point.

beep boop found out about the resets when he accidentally stumbled across the radio frequency the pseudodeity was using to communicate with a colleague (penodir naturally communicate via radio waves - they can communicate vocally but many find it uncomfortable and choose to sign instead). to avoid being reset (again), beep boop fled penodir society.

its kinda hard to find legit work when your species is only known for murder, so beep boop is quickly shunted into the role of a space pirate for hire.

once he gets used to the fact hes killing other people, beep boop becomes one of the most feared and well known space pirates for hire in the intergalactic underbelly. made especially infamous by the fact that if a boss purposely harms or even disrespects him, he will shoot them then and there - no matter how much theyre paying him.

after a few thousand years, beep boop grows tired of his work and seeks to retire. his story isnt really too developed from here though

Anonymous

Anonymous Sun 29 Oct 2023 16:03:50 No.1413540 Report

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>>1413177

Hey, I remember your last thread. I yelled at you that time too.

How the fuck do you still suck so much at drawing? There are all these drawing resources online. How are you just continuing in this neverending cycle of artistic failure? Even an AI can draw better than you.

I'm having a hard time yelling at you about the story itself. It's actually not that terrible. I mean, it's a little cringeworthy, but it could be way worse. I suppose it's ok for a cringelord who clearly has no social skills and never interacts with other humans.

I still don't get why you feel the need to make every OC some overpowered marysue badass. You seem to feel bad about this, so why don't you consciously choose to make a character that is weak, and that has to survive despite his weakness?

Also:

I still think you should ditch the pronoun bullshit.

If you're trying to write, you should definitely study a book on the rules of grammar and punctuation and all that. Right now, your writing immediately stands out as unprofessional and immature. Strunk and White's Elements of Style is a pretty classic book on the topic.

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