Hello, I've been spending the past year or two on creating a new and improved translation of the film "Mishima: A Life In Four Chapters" about Yukio Mishima. The official American translation are dubtitles and often do not follow what is said at all. I'd like to squeeze out a rough draft by the 20th whereupon I travel for Christmas, but there's still a couple of dozen lines I need help with translating. Please read the statement in pic related for more info. Here's what I have so far:

https://mega.nz/folder/D1pVjLzC#QTshgn6nF6EIsYU8TBOPRA

I am only a rank amateur, but I am confident that what I am turning out is at least an improvement on what has gone before, therefore worth doing, and that once my version is finalised with help, it can then be improved upon further by others in the future. Many thanks for any help you can provide.