>>18834461after taking a look, it sounds clunky because it's not alligned with the beat.
those grid lines represent beats.
You have a whole beat, which is the biggest beat, you have a half beat, which is half of that, a quarter-beat which is half of that, and an eight beat, which is half of that, and so on and so forth.
You've got inconsistant, mismatched quarter, eight, and sixteenth notes. They should go in a clear, concise pattern, sticking to the grid.