>>3183447>>3182525https://pastebin.com/0ADw1GT3Did the first handful of lines. By no means am I an expert at this, there are jokes aplenty about engineers and their mastery of the English language, but I liked to believe I was more adept than my classmates.
Anyway, I'll continue looking over it for smaller tweaks tomorrow, but I'd really like an answer about the dialogue. If you decide to change the approach, it'll be an undertaking to fix it all up, but I feel it'll be easier to read.
