>>717848Oh yeah, that's true I have a lot of self explanatory and redundant stuff when you put it like that, i suppose i dont really notice it though but i should be more aware. For the protagonist I try to write him like how a kid would talk, but idk I'm trying to balance the immaturity.
For the second dude's dialogue I'm trying to make him sound somewhat cutthroat, cold, or condescending at times. He is kind of rude and at times he talks in incomplete sentences because he doesn't like to drone on most of the time. Idk how to convey that. I agree he is supposed to be well-spoken at times but I guess I'm not sure how to balance his bluntness and write his dialogue at times. The third character's dialogue is even worse, because she's supposed to be intelligent but I'm the complete opposite of her, kek.
>ignore this bitch talking shit about the storyHeyyyyy don't say that... she's my sister and half of my reasons for drawing comics is for her to enjoy. She knows the comic is very flawed but said for my first time it is enjoyable and fun, and she told me she cried reading the script, kekekekek. Haha, I appreciate the sentiment though thanks for reading man. I know it's kind of time consuming with all the words.