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>>3064884 says, particularly the part about glamourising smoking.
On a more technical level, here are my most major criticisms:
- The model's skin has been improperly retouched to the point that it looks grotesque. It looks like you have just got the blur tool and airbrushed her with it. The only texture in her skin are the parts closest to her belly button (which looks like an asshole btw), her bikini top and bottom, bracelet, hair, and other areas of high contrast such as the background. Honestly, look at the texture in her bikini top, hat or hair and compare it to the closest bit of skin.
- The blob (a boat I think) at the end of the pier is distracting, could have just cropped the photo in to get rid of it.
- The colourful out-of-focus area to the right of her left shoulder is also distracting, this could have been rectified by cloning in some vegetation on top.
- The shadow over her face caused by the brim of the hat is godawful. I understand that people have successfully done some creative shadow work with brimmed hats but this is not an example of that. A reflector or second flash from underneath would have further filled that shadow.
- The scratches on her glasses have been exacerbated by the reflection of the flash. I understand you need to have a bit of catch-eye but this is just off-putting. I would have spent the time retouching those glasses.
- There is no structure to the right side (viewer's left) of the hat.
- The wet hair is ridiculous, but I won't get into that now. I understand it is tough to make wet hair actually look good, and not make it look like the model just came from a bukkake.
- The edges of the model are absolutely riddled with chromatic aberration. To be honest, I don't even know why you were even shooting at f1.4, the background is so far away the model will be separated with anything up to f11.
Would you like me to explain why this photo is boring on an artistic level?
